Guys need your help for getting through Ph.D from NUS. I am pasting my SOP on the mail body please review it and help me in making it better. Thanks in advance. Since cannot paste the complete SOP in a single thread pasting it in pieces.

Statement of Purpose Part 1
My life has been with lots of ups and downs, some with rough roads and some with smooth. All this ups and downs is keeping me alive. My interest towards computers started during the 90’s when the first Microsoft Windows was launched. Those were the time when the era of desktop computer started. My dad gifted me my first computer with Intel Pentium 2 processor, 128 MB RAM, and a 4 GB hard disk.
During those time I used to play lots of computer games, some popular one like Dave, Retal to the latest once like Call of Duty. So during the course of my life the curiosity increased in knowing how the games were developed and how to develop a new one. Since then there was a shift in interest from gaming to development.
I started my first coding lesson named “Hello World” in C language. Then from there after it has been a complete different world of computers and language. Getting to learn all those If-else conditions, functions, arrays and the coding standards has been fascinating. When I was in class 12th worked on a project named “Timetable Management” using C language under the super vision of Mr Manish (Head Computer Science Department, Doon Public School). Since then my interest has been towards computers and software engineering.
For following my passion and interest towards Software Engineering I opted to do my graduation in Bachelor’s in Computer Application (BCA). I got admission in a reputed state university where I was among the top 5 who were able to complete all coding related questions and projects on time.